The Official Writing Challenge
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Ooh! I do hope the young mom will be all right. I'm glad the baby was ok. From the sounds of it, I thought all that blood covering the seat was something terrible. It's interesting how a small wound can bleed so profusely.
Well told story.
You really surprised me with this one. I thought this was going to be a quiet story about baking cookies, and then you put me right into the action.

I think you did a great job writing this. My only suggestions would be to maybe come up with a different title, because I don't think your current title does your great story justice. Also, I noticed a few typos, but this is easily fixed and not a big deal. Sometimes even when you double check a story, there are still errors that get missed.

You had me on the edge of my seat, and I appreciate you sharing this story. Keep up the good work! :)
10/25/08
I love stories that give a twist and you sure did. It left me wondering about the mother and child. I noticed a few typos and at moments where more detail could have been used but beyond that your story was a pleasant surprise. The title definitely makes you think something different about your story, but it sets the reader up for a surprise. Good job and keep writing.
10/29/08
Very well done! The ending was a surprise, I couln't imagine where you were going when I considered the title.
CheeryBlossom