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10/16/08
Very nice correlation! Never occurred to me that way. Great job!
10/18/08
I really enjoy devotionals that start with a real-life story, as this one did.

Be careful of run-on sentences and comma splices.

You made the scene between the brothers and sisters very real and believable.
I loved your story. These stories help us to revisit our own lives as young adults. This had me in tears, as I imagined your brother and sister coming to grasp with what had happened.
Jeanie