The Official Writing Challenge
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10/09/08
Well done--realistic characters and situtation, and an ending that doesn't fizzle, but also doesn't tie everything up with a pretty bow. Just the right note of hope there...
10/12/08
Excellent!!! It seems like her confession is all blurted a bit too fast and is too neatly explained, but everything else is rock-solid. Great story, super writing, and the last line ends the story with a hopeful note, leaving us satisfied, but not forcefed. This entry should do well!