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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Camping (07/11/05)
As I was thinking about this camping trip I had visions of Granger. Turned out to be a total disaster...... Mitchel did not like to go camping, except with his Grandmother Claudia , my Sister....... Scottie did not like to do anything at all except grumble with me..... He was a little smaller than his Brother Scottie. HE decided to torture me.....That was his main theme in life was to make his Aunt miserable......They did everything they could to me.....They threw water on me, they sulked off and yelled at me.....It was like , my world had come to an end....You see these little two boys were the light of my life..... I had lost 3 babies and these were the ones to replace a couple of them.....The other set of twins had their own problems... Yes God gave me back 4 little cute snugly little ones to replace the ones I lost.......Now they were being hateful, and my world was coming to an end.......These little sweet baby's had turned into little mean boys....... It was simple....They didn't know me.......... They were about to meet the meanest Aunt they ever had......I had decided as a Christian i was going to teach them a lesson...... So I went outside during nap time and found a piece of rope..... I put it around a large pine tree, and tied it tight...... Each time they threw something at me... I put it on the tree..... I tied everything to the tree, hanging it from the rope....There were forks, rocks, weeds, and a bouquet of flowers by the end of the day........All they needed was a little respect for their Aunt Bonnie.....I was bound to teach them a lesson if it took me all day...... So the last thrown article came busing past my head... I really can't remember what it was... But i nailed it to the tree.........Next came the boys.... I picked Scottie up and we headed for the tree....Screaming as loud as he could, waking everyone in the camp up.....Never wake my Sister up from a nap.... she was crabby....Tammy woke up, while i was trying to nail, Scotty's tongue to that tree.......I told you to behave yourself, you little stinker, now you have had it.... Stick your tongue out.... I Have the hammer ready.....Well to make a story short, he ran away and never did look back........ But at the end of the day...... Scott comes up to me and says Aunt Bonnie , you wouldn't really nail my tongue to that tree, would you? Its illegal... I told him well we will never know will we.... He gave me a kiss and we have been close sense then....... So when you go camping, take not only a prayer and a rope....But a little authority and a big hug and kiss, the next time a fork comes flying past your head........Abortion, Fetal Research, and Harvesting... haven' t got a chance.... While my camping skills are around..Try it you'll like it when under fire to protect the unborn....Jesus Christ loves us...But he will only take so much on a camping trip.....Watch your tongue when you are camping and telling everyone , you like abortion.....and you think that , Fetal Research is good for making medicine. Harvesting a Human Baby.... God will not stand for..... He sent those Babies to earth, to be a Witness To The Nations .... That he is King of Kings and Lord of Lords.....
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Nina Phillips
07/18/05
OK, I liked the first version better. Next the (....)at the end of all the sentences, and paragraph spacing was a little rough for this peice. The story is very good, however. Descriptions good too. Love much in Christ, littlelight
dub W
07/21/05
Put this in normal submission form and it will become readable. Note: ellipsis (...) are three dots meaning left out text. A closing ellipsis may have four dots (....), however the next break is an eight dot ellipsis which means a left out line of poetry.
Val Clark
07/23/05
Catchy title. Sounds like Aunt Bonnie has a wicked sense of humour. Stuggled with the slab of text and the ....s. In more traditional format it would be a more coherent read. I didn't get the ending, either. But then I could be thick!
Shari Armstrong 
07/23/05
The ...'s were a little distracting. A nice start to something that with some proofreading/editing would be even better.