The Official Writing Challenge
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09/20/08
A good illustration of the uncertainties of life.

I'd maybe have varied the beginning of the sentences a bit. Repetition can be good, but you can also achieve repetition with concepts rather than the words.

I was waiting for a spiritual tie in, and you got it in at the end. God job.
09/20/08
Very creative, although I'm not sure I agree with all of them. Salvation not a matter of chance. We can be sure of eternal life. I'm glad I can rest in that thought.