The Official Writing Challenge
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09/18/08
Interesting story. You lost me in the middle, but I think I got the message of realizing that friends come and go.
09/19/08
This has great potential. The message of the story is a good one, and with some fine tuning, you will have a fantastic piece of work here. Keep up the good work!
09/19/08
I really loved the final paragraph. I thought your basic story was a good one. I could picture the sequence of events. You need to take care with grammar, particulalry the tenses - you mix up present tense and past tense in the same entences. The captial letters in the dialogue are not necessary.