The Official Writing Challenge
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09/18/08
smile...I was waiting for you to describe the later years. Good thoughts at the end, but you kind of ran out steam. It's hard with the word count, but the beginning was great!
09/19/08
I enjoyed the repetition of the phrase "Life is a game." I thought yu might bring it round full circle with children of your own and trying to instill upon them the rules of the game you had been taught. The children turning out to be just like the parents.
I liked the repetition of "life is a game". Too bad you didnt have enough room to continue with the life with children of their own and coming 'full circle'.
You described teenagers very well!