The Official Writing Challenge
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07/11/05
Nice read. I enjoyed the descriptions and comparisons. Have done the same kind of thing watching my children.
07/12/05
Very soft poetic prose, a nice read. Put a space between paragraphs to make readability easier.
07/12/05
I agree, very nice and smoothly flowing. God bless, littlelight
07/14/05
A nice story -I esepcially like the part about cathching the mini leviathans :)
I liked the inclusion of past, present, future. This is a nice quote: "I see my past played out before me, different waters... different dancers same song." Poetic and yet real.