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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Snap (09/04/08)

TITLE: The Man And The Charger
By Helen Harris


In the desert came a man who appearance and eating habits seem strange. He preached crying out, "Repent: for the kingdon of heaven is at hand; Prepare the way of the Lord, make His path straight." Many came out to hear him preach the Word. Some came out in belief and some came out in mere curiosity. Many came out, all the region round confessing their sins and were baptized of him, the preacher.

The man saw them that came out in mere curiosity not willing to confess their sins and he said to them, " o generation of vipers, who has warned you to flee from the wrath to come."
Later the preacher said, " Now also the axe is laid unto the root of the trees: Every tree which bring not forth good fruit is cut down and cast into the fire.

The day came and this preacher man was cast into prison by a powerful man for his wife's sake because of the truth he preached of her, but still she wasn't satisfied and plotted with her daughter to have the preacher killed.

For the plotted oath's sake the powerful man gave the snap command: Then a loud dreadful noise was heard: As of a sharp hitting, cracking sound of snapping of bones.

Those that was sent brought in a charger and gave to the woman's daughter of Dance that pleased the powerful man. The daughter took the gift she asked for and gave it to her mother.

This Man, the One whom came to the preacher to be baptized and the preacher said, "I have need to be baptized of You." speaks of the preacher man, " Among them that are born of women, there has not one Greater that this preacher man.

It is He, the One whom the preacher baptized in the desert that speak of the preacher. The One whom after being baptized went straighway out of the water opening the heaven and the Spirit of God decending like a dove with lighting upon Him: and a Voice was heard, "This is my Beloved Son, in whom I am Well Please."

The snap memory of the peacher Word ring out, "I indeed baptize you with water unto repentance: but One cometh after me is Mightier than I, whose shoes I am not worthy to bear: He shall baptize you with the Holy Ghost, and with fire was the Cry out of the preacher man.

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Yvonne Blake 09/12/08
Interesting way of writing about John the Baptist. The sequence seemed out of order and a bit confusing. I like the way that you intermingled the Scripture.
Dan Blankenship 09/12/08
I agree with Yvonne, and I would add theat the "snap" entries seemed a bit forced. Other than that, the descriptive writing and retelling of the John the Baptist story was good.

May God bless.

Dan Blankenship

Gregory Kane09/14/08
It's good to take on board the helpful criticisms of others and not become discouraged. You clearly know your Scriptures. Your challenge now is to shape your stories so that they flow more smoothly. Hang on in there and become a polished arrow in the Lord's quiver.
Noreen Ophoff09/17/08
Sometimes critics' comments are hard on the writer. They are usually given in the love of the Lord. Watch the who and whom, and recheck spelling.