The Official Writing Challenge
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09/04/08
Wow, that is most certainly a dare!
Anything that bucks the system takes tons of courage.

You have portrayed that wonderfully!

Nice job!
09/08/08
This was kinda scary.. does this really happen? Very intense and you had me wondering what was going to happen. Looking forward to reading your next story!
09/09/08
I am so glad my doctors aren't like that! Course, I do work night shift and we pretty much manage our patients on our own. I totally know that situation - love the last line (I confess, I've said it once or twice....) A few grammar fixes and your story is an A-plus!
09/09/08
Fascinating situation.

I wonder if it'd improve the story with less introductory material, and expansion of the conflict between the doctor and the patient.

I know that I would have been intimidated by such a doctor! Glad those days are behind me!
I liked this! Good tension and conflict!
09/09/08
Wow, that was great! The characters seemed very true to life. I can really imagine the mother's babbling insistence, and the discomfort of the MC. I found myself wanting to give the doctor what-for, so you know you wrote it convincingly! Great job!
09/16/08
Incredible - on this one too I would love to await the "next chapter". Intriguing writing!