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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Truth or Dare (08/28/08)

TITLE: True Confessions
By Leah Nichols
09/01/08


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“Let's play Truth or Dare!”

I knew in that moment I could not escape. Tricia knew I would never pick Dare, and she had pestered me so often about telling Jake my true feelings that she determined to force it out of me. Now gathered in Ally's living room, we had both the guys and the girls in place. And I would never lie.

“Ally starts!” Jake directed. Dang, he was so cute! Dark, curly hair; brown eyes almost black; dazzling smile and dimpled cheeks – he excelled in nearly every activity and, in my mind, completely blew away all the competition. Miraculously I usually held my composure in his presence, though my heart would beat wildly as if to spring out of my chest.

Jake chose the seat on the couch opposite me, next to Ryan. Tricia poked me from the right side. Of course she thought he wanted a good view of me.

Ally grinned and perched on the armrest of the recliner. “Dare.”

Now began the ultimate challenge. Ally would never allow anyone to best her in a dare, and few of us wanted to try some of the things she was more than willing to attempt.

Natalie proposed the first idea. “Make up a phone number, dial it, then talk as long as the other person does.”

“But it's eleven-thirty!” Ally complained. We knew full well that she would do it anyway.

“Just be really weird and vague,” offered Josh. “Then they'll hang up sooner.”

I really do not know how my turn came so quickly. After Ally's random phone call, Isaiah's confession of his most disgusting personal habit, and Tricia's agreement to drink a concoction of beverages and sauces, I realized that the moment had arrived for me to participate. I briefly considered choosing the dare to avoid the inevitable.

“Truth,” I said, bracing myself for the question I knew would come.

“Do you like me?” The expected question.

The wrong source!

We all sat in breathless silence as I looked across the room, to Ryan. Not Jake.

Jake let out a low chuckle. “Well, Katie; it's your moment to confess. We know you like your friend here, but do you LIKE like him?”

Ryan waited calmly with a gentle smile. His eyes locked into mine, heart bared open before me. He really liked me, and I had never known.

I paused, terror gripping my thoughts. How could this happen? Did I really have to define the extent of my friendship in that very second, to Ryan, one of my closest friends? If I admitted to not “like liking” him, would that break his heart and end all the fun times we shared?

Did I like him? Had my physical attraction to Jake so distracted me from realizing my true feelings for a good friend? Did I completely miss Ryan's intentions toward me in my own world of Jake-adoration? All the little things Ryan had done to bless me, to help me, to plan activities in which we could have fun together....had it all meant more than the simple enjoyment of each other's company?

I liked Ryan, as a friend, certainly. I did not want our relationship to change. This stupid game had to come in the way, to force me to decide the outcome of our friendship.

“Katie?” Tricia gently nudged. She dared not speak more than necessary, knowing I wrestled with my answer.

If I answered yes, Ryan would no doubt pursue me. If no, it could break his heart.

The few minutes I paused seemed to stretch into eternity. I looked up at Ryan, as he stared expectantly at me. Not knowing what I would say, I closed my eyes and prayed. Lord, give me the right answer!

I opened my mouth and gave my response.

*******

My husband enters our room, breaking my thoughts. “What's on your mind, darling?”

“Just thinking back to our silly college games.”

“Which one?”

“Truth or Dare.”

He grins and slides in next to me as I sit at the end of the bed. “I love that game.”

“Why do you say that?” I know the reason, but I love to hear him say it.

“Because I knew you'd say yes.”


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LauraLee Shaw09/04/08
Great story for the topic! I like your ending. Well done.
Valarie Sullivan09/08/08
Aw, this was precious! You had me on the edge of my seat! What was she going to say???
Good job!
HQ Creston09/08/08
I really liked it had me waiting for your answer. You write very well and keep your audience motivated to read on.
Shirley McClay 09/08/08
This is in beginners??? I had to double check! WOW. I was totally tense for her. And I LOVED the ending. Very romantic.
Dee Yoder 09/09/08
Wonderful! Great story here and your writing hits the nail squarely on the head. ( ; (Love the dialogue!)
Jan Ackerson 09/09/08
Very clever story with a neat twist.

My only nitpick--the kids acted and sounded more like high school students than college students to me. I was surprised at the mention of "college games."

I love the narrator's mental ruminations as she considers her answer--very well done.
Joshua Janoski09/09/08
The MC's internal dialogue was very good, and I was so happy when I found out that she said yes. I was really hoping that she would. I agree that this game felt like something that a younger crowd would play, but I could also picture a college group playing it too.

Cute story that I'm sure a lot of girls (and maybe even some guys) will be able to relate to.
Kristi Peifer09/09/08
You definitely got my attention! I couldn't wait to see what she did! I also was thrown by the college reference, though. Overall, great job!
Lynda Schultz 09/09/08
Oh, I love this. Talk about sudden revelations. For a second there I thought you were going to leave us in suspense as to how it ended—so glad you didn't. Well done.
Beckie Stewart09/10/08
I loved this take on the truth or dare game.
Sheri Gordon09/10/08
This is really cute, and written well. I could buy that kids would play this in college, but the phrase "like like" seems definitely more high-schoolish.

Your writing is good, especially the dialogue and thoughts. Try to avoid using cliches like "my heart would beat wildly as if to spring out of my chest."

Very good job with the topic. And the ending is very sweet.
Marlene Austin09/11/08
Wow. Really good "edge-of-your-seat" plot. Much like the Lady or the Tiger - which door will be chosen.... :)
Joshua Janoski09/11/08
You're moving on up! Yeah Yeah! Great job with this one. :)
Karlene Jacobsen 09/11/08
I believe telling the truth is the most daring thing anyone can do. Just look at the tension, the anticipation, the expectancy that you stirred up in those in that scene as well with your readers.

One of the definitions for dare is to do something courageous, and you showed the two acting simultaneously very well.
Sara Harricharan 09/15/08
Well, I am returning a pretty little yellow box. (and I have never played group jumprope either, so that makes two of us!) LOL! Glad I didn't miss this one (spare time is so hard to find these days!) but this was GOOD! Congrats on your win, it was certainly well-deserved! I liked the characters and especially that she said "Yes." I was hoping she would. Cute+fun story. ^_^