The Official Writing Challenge
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09/06/08
This was very well written. I felt like I was there.

Word count may have gotten you, but I'd love to see an extended version of this, with a few more descriptions. Also, you probably didn't need the *** and "...year later." One or the other would have been fine. :)

Great job with this. Keep writing.
09/06/08
I loved this story! I would like to know how her sister got the baby, though. You definitely need more words;) Great job. Wonderful writing!