The Official Writing Challenge
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08/28/08
Sweet smile-bringing ending!
I like that you don't know what Dad is looking for until the end. Very touching story.
08/29/08
This was well-written. Would've taken it up another notch had you expanded it, painted the scene a little more, but it is very good as is. Your ending is excellent.