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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Patience (08/21/08)

TITLE: The Two Minute Break
By CJ Raney


Sue awoke startled, sitting straight up in bed. She stared at the clock.

“Oh, no! I’m late.”

Sue grabbed her robe, tying it as she went out the door. Down the hallway, she knocked on the first two bedroom doors.

“Jill, time to get up. We are running late.”

“Justin, Johnny, come on, get up.”

In the third bedroom, she approached the twin bed and gently stroked the little arm stinking out from the covers.

“Elizabeth, time to get up.”

“Do I have to?”

“Yes, dear, it’s your first day of kindergarten.”

Elizabeth rolled out of bed and yawned. Sue took Elizabeth’s new yellow dress with purple violets and slipped it over her daughter’s head.

“Grab your socks and meet me downstairs,” Sue said, as she hurried from the room.

Walking back by, Sue opened Jill’s door. “Come on, we have to go.”

“I’m up!” Jill growled.

“God knew I could only handle one teenage girl at a time.” Sue shook her head and chuckled.

Sue opened the twin’s door next, “Get up boys. “

“I’m up.” Johnny said cheerfully. “What’s for breakfast? I’m starving.”

“Me, too” moaned Justin.

“Everyone, Come down when you’re dressed.”

Sue walked into her room, towards the small white crib, where Mary was still sleeping. I don’t know why Dave gets called out of town when I need him. I only have four kids that need to get to three different schools and I got up late. “UGH!”

Sue heard Mary start to stir. She peeked into the crib as Mary rolled over with the sweetest little grin.

“Good morning, sweetheart.”

Sue scooped Mary up and headed downstairs.

The dog was barking, the phone was ringing and kids were yelling.

“Mommmm! Johnny won’t let me in the bathroom!” Jill hollered.

With the baby on her hip, she grabbed the phone as she opened the door to let the dog out.

“Hello…hi, honey… Are you on the way to your meeting?” Sue knew her anxious mood could be heard in her voice.

Needing a free arm, Sue slipped Mary into her swing. She placed cereal bowls out on the counter and grabbed the milk from the fridge.

“Well, I’m running late. The kids are fighting over the bathroom and…..”

“Mom, I can’t find my new green shirt.” Justin tugged at Sue’s robe.

The dog barked at the patio door to come back in, and call waiting beeped as Dave was telling her about his meeting. She glazed at the caller id.

“Sorry, Dave, that’s Mom. I’ll call you back. Love you. Bye”

”Hi, mom… oh, you sound awful………yes, I can do that………Let me get the kids dropped off ………………Did you call your doctor?....…..I will be there soon….love you.”

Sue cranked Mary’s swing on her way to let the dog back in. The kids scampered down the stairs.

“Mom, I can’t find my shoes.”

“Mom, can I go to Jeff’s house after school?”

“Mom, I need you to do my hair.”

“Mom, you need to sign this.”

“Mom, I’m not hungry.”

The dog was at the window, barking at the squirrels and Mary began to fuss. Sue looked at her watch.

“Jill, watch your sister. Justin, let your dog out again. I’ve got to get dressed! “

With a long sigh, Sue closed her bedroom door. After throwing on a pair of jeans and a shirt, she pulled her hair up in a ponytail. She grabbed the phone and dialed her best friend.

“Hello.” Robin answered.

“I have to vent! I am running late, the kids and the dog are driving me crazy. Mom is sick and needs a ride to the doctor. Oh, and Dave he is out of town. How convenient, huh?”

“Stop and breathe, Sue. We need to pray for some patience for you today.”

“Patience? Don’t pray for that!”

“Why not?”

“Robin, don’t you remember Sister Brooks, from the Ladies’ Retreat? She told us every time she prayed for patience she got pregnant! Six kids later, she figured it out.”

Robin laughed, “Okay, we will just pray for strength.”

“Thanks. I needed that 2 minute break.”

Taking a deep breath, Sue handed Justin his green shirt, Johnny his shoes, Jill a green apple off the counter (since she didn’t eat), braided Elizabeth’s hair, signed Justin’s paper, let the dog in, picked up Mary and the diaper bag, and loaded everyone in the mini-van.

“Strengthened with all might, according to his glorious power, unto all patience and longsuffering with joyfulness;”
Colossians 1:11 (KJV)

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Joy Faire Stewart08/28/08
Great job with details showing this frazzled mom's morning. The scenes were vivid and most moms can relate. I wasn't expecting the reason the mom didn't want to pray for patiences...I LOL.
LauraLee Shaw08/29/08
I really like this story. Very true to life, and I enjoyed the fast pace of it. Well done.