The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this very much.
08/28/08
Well written, funny, and entertaining. In fact, nearly flawless except one thing; the whole patience thing seemed a little too secondary to the story. But I do that all the time, so no big deal.

Nice job.

Oh, and this story just confirms what I already knew...women can't read a map!

LOL

:-)

I can hear the sighs though my computer.

May God bless.
Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship

08/28/08
Great descriptions and a fun read. Thanks!
08/29/08
very funny liked it a lot
09/01/08
Hehehe This was cute.

My only suggestion (and this could very well be just me) would be to add some more descriptions. I was a bit confused in some places. Again, probably just me.

Creative entry. Keep writing!
Lots of action in this piece. With a limit of 750 words, this leaves little room for character development. Nice job. :)
09/01/08
What a fun entry! Nice job!
09/01/08
What a fun story! I like that the firefighters were all women (girl power!) :) I agree that it's a bit weak on topic, and in one place I got confused - the chief told her the truck was stuck before he stuck it. But I loved her smarty-pants reply. Nice job!