The Official Writing Challenge
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Good point. I think a second edit will correct a few of the errors I noticed. For some reason I felt rushed reading this story and I think it was the effect you wanted. Keep writing.
Loved it. The honesty factor plays so well in your story.

I've made a lot of "time" and "patience" mistakes in my life. I can truly relate to failing to see the little moments when they're right in front of me.

There are a few minor grammar (writing) errors that are no big deal. If you re-read it, you'll see you left out a word in the beginning lines.

Anyhow, excellent way to approach the topic!

May God bless.

Dan Blankenship

I found this a clever take on the topic--and a bit too familiar, if you know what I mean.;) You definitely convicted ME. Nicely done.
been there, hopefully havent done that to many times.
A message I needed to hear today.
Come to think of it, I need to hear it every day.
Patience is an elusive thing...

Yes, there were some errors in the piece, but overall it's quite good. Keep up the good work!