The Official Writing Challenge
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Along with your mc, I wanted his wife to make the right choice. He was very persuasive.
Your story would be easier to read with spaces between the paragraphs.
"Jacob's Angel," good analogy the MC used and I hoped his wife would be persuaded.
08/23/08
I like this a lot--would love to see it expanded, with more descriptions of actions, more background story, that sort of thing. Huge potential here.
08/23/08
Hi: agree with the other comments - good story line and thank you for sharing.