The Official Writing Challenge
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Your poem reveals the futility of pretense.
I enjoyed the poem and the last stanza brings it all together. Good job!
08/23/08
There are a few levels of meaning here--well done!

I'd suggest that a tiny tweaking of the meter might make it flow just a bit more smoothly.

I like that this is both simple and deep.
This a very delightful poem. I enjoyed the tone and flow.