The Official Writing Challenge
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08/14/08
The emotion you created in this story was good, and very real. I felt like I was there with them.

I would have maybe brought out "hide" more. I definitely got the "seek" part, but the "hide" was harder to find. ;)

Great job. Keep up the great writing!
08/16/08
Very nicely done.God knows ahead of time what we need. Good descriptions. Keep writing.
08/18/08
Wonderful first entry. You captured a lot of emotion. Keep entering the challenges... you belong here.
08/20/08
Very nice!

May God bless.

Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship