The Official Writing Challenge
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Good descriptions. I wasn't sure if this was a war story or not. I smiled when it was revealed they were friends playing. Good job.
Love this and congratulations on your first place win. Great job!
Great job drawing me into the action, keeping my attention, and then leaving me with a smile. Congrats on your 1st place! See you in Level 2 next week! :) Cat
Congratulations on your first place award. Great writing, good descriptions, nice job holding my attention and the surprise ending. If it didn't bring a smile to all who read it their smile button must need fixing.
What a well woven story with a fantastic twist. I loved this one. Great job, and congrats on your 1st place win...move it on up!
Enjoyed this very much.
Congratulations on your win
awwww I thought it was paintball :( nice story, congrats
This is such a great story, typical of the story-teller you are! CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved first place win. As always, I continue to be one of your biggest fans and look forward to another intriguing, compelling, riveting Kristie-story in Level 2. Well done girl!!