The Official Writing Challenge
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08/15/08
Good descriptions. I wasn't sure if this was a war story or not. I smiled when it was revealed they were friends playing. Good job.
Love this and congratulations on your first place win. Great job!
08/21/08
Great job drawing me into the action, keeping my attention, and then leaving me with a smile. Congrats on your 1st place! See you in Level 2 next week! :) Cat
Congratulations on your first place award. Great writing, good descriptions, nice job holding my attention and the surprise ending. If it didn't bring a smile to all who read it their smile button must need fixing.
08/21/08
What a well woven story with a fantastic twist. I loved this one. Great job, and congrats on your 1st place win...move it on up!
Enjoyed this very much.
Congratulations on your win
08/23/08
awwww I thought it was paintball :( nice story, congrats
This is such a great story, typical of the story-teller you are! CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved first place win. As always, I continue to be one of your biggest fans and look forward to another intriguing, compelling, riveting Kristie-story in Level 2. Well done girl!!