The Official Writing Challenge
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07/12/05
This is a really nice peace, with a little polish it'll be even better :)
WoW ! no sleeping on the beach. Fancy that. A little difficult to read because it needed more spacing, but hey, good storyline.
I enjoyed reading this. What a long night! I had to laugh at the "once it rained for a whole week". I live in Washington, so its more of a shock if it sunshines for a whole week! :-D I hope you stayed awake until the fireworks, I'll bet they were glorious over the waves.
07/14/05
Nice entry. It was written in an interesting way, expressing your thoughts honestly and sincerely.
07/14/05
California has alot of weird laws (LOL) Nice writing, but a little harder to read without spacing. You had to be awake for the fireworks then!
God bless ya, littlelight
07/15/05
Very visual. I wonder if moving this to 3rd. person past tense would make it stronger. Present tense is difficult to write/read. Add some spaces between paragraphs and you have a good one. Thanks for posting.
A documentary of weary waiting - ?!? Did you make it to the fireworks?