The Official Writing Challenge
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08/14/08
Those were some interesting anectdotes. It might have been better to stick to just one and apply it to spiritual things. Keep writing.
08/14/08
Interesting stories. It seemed a little disjointed as if it needed better flow. It felt like I was reading facts rather than a story. Sometimes description helps or even to view it as talking so the story comes allive. Paw-Paw sounds like a fun pet. Definitely keep writing.
08/15/08
I agree that it may have been better with just one story. Also, watch your punctuation and spelling. Hard work was put into this. Keep writing.