The Official Writing Challenge
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08/14/08
Goosebumps on the last sentence. Good Job! So many times even in the simple things we forget the importance of our salvation. Thank you for reflecting on such an important aspect.
08/14/08
Interesting poem! Good repetition at the end of each stanza. Well done.
I enjoyed this, it reads smoothly which is something I look for
Sorry about that I didn't get finished. This poem calls us to where many of us are in life. The last four lines brinG and ecxellant close which is an open door bidding us to enter in. Like I said excellent.

Looking out the Window of Expectation
Meg
08/14/08
Very nice.

May God bless.

Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship

I think you needed a question mark in the 2nd line of the last stanza. Otherwise, perfect in every way! A blessing to all of us. Please keep writing!
08/18/08
I think your poetry was very good. The syllables lind up to create a perfect rhythm. Are you sure you should be in the beginner's level. I think this poem was way to good and thought provoking to be a beginner. I look forward to reading more of your work.