The Official Writing Challenge
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08/11/08
This is a good children's story. I would have liked a little more description of the characters, the land, and the river.
You showed the consequences of disobedience very well.
08/13/08
A good lesson . More description of the setting would have been nice.
08/13/08
Great job!

Enjoyed it all!

May God bless!

Sincerely,
Dan Blankenship