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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Bridge (07/31/08)

TITLE: The River
By melissa buckley


Ollie and Poppy were busy picking flowers by the riverbank to put on their table at home. They were so busy in fact that they had not noticed how late it was. Only when they heard their daddy shouting them did they realise they should be getting home.

Their home was on the other side of the river. They had crossed a bridge earlier in the day but without knowing they had wandered from it.
"We had better hurry back to the bridge" Poppy said.
"No need" Ollie told her, "we can cross right here."
"How?" Poppy asked, feeling very unsure.
Ollie stood at the edge of the riverbank and looked up and down at the gurgling waters.
"See" he pointed, "there are some big stones right here, we can hop across on them."
Poppy shook her head, "Daddy said we could only cross the river by going over the bridge."
"Don't be such a baby" Ollie told her, "Daddy only said that because he wants to spoil our fun and be boring. Come on" and he waved his hand, "we can do it!"

Poppy was still not sure. She looked back the way they had walked. She could not even see the wooden bridge which they had crossed that morning. She could still hear their daddy shouting them. Poppy decided it probably would be quicker to cross right here like Ollie had suggested.
"Okay" she agreed, "but you go first." She was a little scared because the water looked like it was flowing rather fast.

Ollie did not need to be told twice, he eagerly stretched out his leg and took the first step. His right foot landed on the smooth stone sticking out of the water. So far so good, now to bring his left foot onto the stone, he slowly brought it to rest alongside the other.
"No problem" he shouted back to Poppy. As Ollie began to cross the river further Poppy thought it was okay after all, this looked easy and daddy need never know.

She was about to follow Ollie when suddenly she caught her breath. Ollie's foot had slipped and his whole body fell below the water. As his head was popping in and out of the river she dropped the flowers they had gathered and began to shout for help. It did not take long before she could see her daddy at the other side of the river.
"Ollie's fallen in there!" she pointed.
In less than a minute daddy had jumped into the river and swam to where Ollie was struggling. He scooped him up into his big arms and pulled him back to the edge of the river where Poppy was crying. Daddy lay him down on the grass and waited for him to catch his breath. Ollie was very shocked but he was not hurt.

"Why didn't you cross at the bridge like I told you?" daddy asked them.
"We heard you calling us" Poppy answered "and we thought it would be quicker to cross here."
Daddy shook his head slowly, "I give you rules for a reason, it's not because I want to ruin your fun but to protect you because I love you so much."

Ollie and Poppy felt very ashamed and were very sorry. Daddy smiled at them, "I still love you both very much, and now that you have said sorry, let's go home." He took both their hands and together they all walked back to the bridge and crossed over the river on the wooden boards to their home on the other side.

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Yvonne Blake 08/11/08
This is a good children's story. I would have liked a little more description of the characters, the land, and the river.
You showed the consequences of disobedience very well.
Mary McLeary08/13/08
A good lesson . More description of the setting would have been nice.
Dan Blankenship 08/13/08
Great job!

Enjoyed it all!

May God bless!

Dan Blankenship