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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Concentration (07/24/08)

TITLE: Food that Satisfies
By Julie Seeto


Mary didn’t notice her sister’s wild gestures in the background, nor the crowd that was slowly gathering around them. She was too engrossed with the Teacher’s face. Every word that dripped from his lips was like a balm of truth that fed her soul. There was a strength in His voice and in his laughter – laughter she had not heard from the mouth of any other rabbi, at least not when they spoke of Godly things. Yet this man spoke of God as if he knew him like … a father. It made her heart sing and she wanted to know more. For the moment at least, she sat captivated at his feet soaking up his words as if they were life itself.

But that wasn’t all – there was something else about this teacher that set him apart from anyone else she knew. Something she couldn’t quite understand. A certain warmth radiated from his eyes bearing witness of an eternal love she had never known before. A holy man perhaps, yet he seemed so ordinary, not like the priests. She’d even heard that he touched lepers and more amazingly that they were completely healed. No, this was no ordinary man. Surely God must have sent him to Israel in their affliction. Others must have sensed it too for they followed him wherever he went. The whole world was talking about him. Mary had been hoping she could catch a glimpse of him as he passed by Bethany on his way to Jerusalem. How wonderful that her sister, Martha, had not only met him but had seized the opportunity to be his hostess and brought him and his entourage home.

Suddenly, Mary was jolted out of her concentration. Martha had stormed into their midst, hands firmly on hips and evidently displeased.
“Lord,” Martha complained, “do you not care that my sister has left me to serve alone? Therefore tell her to help me.” (Luke 10:40 NKJV)
Mary hadn’t realized how late it was, nor that their guests by now would be hungry for bread. Her fascination with the visitor had caused her to forget her place.
“Oh! ... Rabbi … I …” she said ashamedly, becoming acutely aware of her sister’s stern look.
Martha waited for the Teacher’s response, expecting him to at least chide Mary for her laziness. Yet he merely nodded at Mary as she rose to her feet and hurried to fulfil her duties. Turning his attention to Martha, he looked at her with a kindness that pierced her anger.
“Martha!” he said, “You are worried and troubled about many things. But one thing is needed, and Mary has chosen that good part, which will not be taken away from her.”(Luke 10:41-42 NKJV)

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Edmond Ng 07/31/08
An interesting read from the POV of Mary. I was just using this biblical story as part of my comment for someone else's article on concentration before reading your article. Glad you wrote this, and yes, concentration is when Jesus has our full attention, and this shall not be taken away from us.
Sara Harricharan 08/01/08
Very good! I liked this story version of an old familiar story. I kind of wished that it'd continued to the end that way instead of reverting to the actual verses, but it is still unique. Good job. ^_^
Sharlyn Guthrie08/05/08
This is a great Bible story for the topic, and you told the story convincingly from Mary's POV. I agree that it would seem more authentic if you rephrased the biblical quotes to make them fit your writing style and tone. All in all, though, you did a wonderful job!
Gerald Shuler 08/05/08
I agree about using your own words to tell the ending. You have an expressive and captivating style that shows true talent. I look forward to seeing your future entries.
Darlene Casino 08/05/08
You certainly have a gift to share with others. You met the "Challenge' and did a very good job in doing so. Be blest as you have blessed others.
Glynis Becker08/05/08
Great job retelling a familiar story. Keep writing!