The Official Writing Challenge
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07/31/08
An interesting read from the POV of Mary. I was just using this biblical story as part of my comment for someone else's article on concentration before reading your article. Glad you wrote this, and yes, concentration is when Jesus has our full attention, and this shall not be taken away from us.
08/01/08
Very good! I liked this story version of an old familiar story. I kind of wished that it'd continued to the end that way instead of reverting to the actual verses, but it is still unique. Good job. ^_^
This is a great Bible story for the topic, and you told the story convincingly from Mary's POV. I agree that it would seem more authentic if you rephrased the biblical quotes to make them fit your writing style and tone. All in all, though, you did a wonderful job!
08/05/08
I agree about using your own words to tell the ending. You have an expressive and captivating style that shows true talent. I look forward to seeing your future entries.
08/05/08
You certainly have a gift to share with others. You met the "Challenge' and did a very good job in doing so. Be blest as you have blessed others.
08/05/08
Great job retelling a familiar story. Keep writing!