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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Concentration (07/24/08)

TITLE: Going to get it.
By Michael Walter
07/29/08


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There I was, lay on the end of my couch gazing into the ditance when I saw it. It zipped right by my face and almost made me fall off the couch. At that moment I decided I was going to get it, this fly is mine. Everytime it stopped I fixed my eyes on it, focused and slowly attempted to sneak up on it. Just as I approached and was ready to launch into action and destroy the pest that ruined my lazy gazing, my master calls. He yells at me "Tessa, come" and breaks my concentration, onlyfor a mere "did you chew this" of course I didnt I say with the most sincere puppy look of confusion. As my master is speaking the pest zips by again. No more waiting I decided I must get it, so I chase it and chase it, nipping at its wings. My concentration is at an all time high, I am zeroed in. The opportunity is now just jump I say, I pounce from the floor to the couch, then from the couch to the air! I got it, the fly is mine! And as I begin to desend with victory in mouth I relize I am headed for a crash landing into the screen door. As the whack takes place and my master come to check on me I attempt to take it in stride and show my prize of the dead fly. He sees it and says good girl, with a pat on the head, and tells me "way to concentrate". And apperently as a dog I understood nothing he said and went back to laying on the couch awaiting my next battle with a pest.


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Sara Harricharan 08/01/08
Cute story! Some spaces between paragraphs would help to make for easier reading.

I was a tad confused that it turned out to be a dog, maybe you could hint to it earlier, so the twist is more fun! I had fun reading it. Nice job. ^_^