The Official Writing Challenge
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07/24/08
You started out with an interesting beginning, but the middle kind of slowed with action, I wanted to see more of what was happening with Emily, you had a good twist though with the phone call. I liked that. Good job! ^_^
07/26/08
An interesting way of getting the message across. Thank God we do not have to get through the line to talk to Him. With His Son, we have direct connection to God through prayer!
Your story is well constructed and engaging. Nice work!
Glad I've signed up for the "Christ calling plan" :) Very creative take on the topic. Good descriptions of the "before" and "after" calling - emotions and results. Nice job. :)
07/29/08
Lots of little "treats" in here for readers--God's phone number = #777 (7 being the number for perfection) and the "Christ calling plan". This is a clever take on the topic. Couple of formatting things to attend to but the flow was easy to follow. [There are some ways to show inner thoughts and quotes within quotes when you switched from "she" to "I" and back again. I know some folks have asked about this very thing on the message boards.]
07/30/08
Good job! Thank God for our direct line to Him. A very interesting take!
Creative and encouraging ideas presented.
Great take on this topic! I enjoyed reading this.
A very creative entry. This looked like it was fun to write, and it had a very good message to convey. I appreciate you sharing this.
What a wonderful story. I had no idea it was about a call to Jesus. What a surprise when I realized how special the call was.
Then I was so happy that the Grandmother came to get the girl. Keep writing.
Jean, congratulations on placing 11th out of 63 entries in Beginners! That is quite an accomplishment!