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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Telephone (07/17/08)

TITLE: Disconnected
By Jean Thornberry
07/24/08


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Maybe this time He’ll pick up.

Ringggg!

Nothing. All Emily could hear was annoying static.

Her heart fell in her chest. Eyes watered with grief, she slammed the phone down.

Why won’t He answer? Does He even care?

If ever she needed to talk with God, it was now. She had just lost both her parents in a plane crash, and now she was all alone in the house. Barely 15, she couldn’t possibly fend for herself. Who would care for her.? She had no one.

Her world had fallen apart. Guilt crushed her heart as she realized how she had cursed them all her life. She couldn’t remember when she ever said “I love you” to them. Now they were gone.

If only I could say, “I’m sorry.” If only I could say, “I love you.” If only I could hold them…

No. They were gone and she knew it. They are with the Lord they served so faithfully. All she had was the God she had rebelled against. The God whose rules she broke time and time again. “I’ll do it my way! I don’t need you!” was always her response to Him.

How she needed Him now! Would He ever talk to me? Could He ever forgive me?

Suddenly she remembered to dial “0”. Surely the operator could help her get through!

“Hello operator? I’m trying to get through to number #777, but there is nothing but static. Could you check the line? I want to get through.

“Let me check that line for you.”

“Emily, you can’t get through. The party on the other line has blocked all anonymous callers. He is only accepting calls from His children.”

“Then I am hopeless! I can never know God and His love!” She cried, “I wanted nothing to do with Him all my life, and now He wants nothing to do with me. I am a stranger to Him, forever lost”

“Wait! There is hope, dear child”, the operator lovingly replied. “You can know Him. He has said that you can get through to Him through His son, Jesus. If you sign up for the Christ calling plan, you’ll become a child of God and have free access to Him whenever you want! Do you want to join? It’s absolutely free!”

“Sign me up! “

“Dial 777 now. You’ll get through.”

She dialed, and waited with bated breath.

Rinnggg!

Yes!!!! An answer! Thank you Jesus!!

“Hello, dear child! How I’ve longed to talk with you. Tell me everything………

Just then her grandmother pulled up and offered to take her in.

“Thank you, Father. I love you!”

“I love you, too Emily! I always have, and always will- for all eternity.”

“Don’t be a stranger. Call anytime!”


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Sara Harricharan 07/24/08
You started out with an interesting beginning, but the middle kind of slowed with action, I wanted to see more of what was happening with Emily, you had a good twist though with the phone call. I liked that. Good job! ^_^
Edmond Ng 07/26/08
An interesting way of getting the message across. Thank God we do not have to get through the line to talk to Him. With His Son, we have direct connection to God through prayer!
Sharlyn Guthrie07/26/08
Your story is well constructed and engaging. Nice work!
Marlene Austin07/29/08
Glad I've signed up for the "Christ calling plan" :) Very creative take on the topic. Good descriptions of the "before" and "after" calling - emotions and results. Nice job. :)
Karen Wilber 07/29/08
Lots of little "treats" in here for readers--God's phone number = #777 (7 being the number for perfection) and the "Christ calling plan". This is a clever take on the topic. Couple of formatting things to attend to but the flow was easy to follow. [There are some ways to show inner thoughts and quotes within quotes when you switched from "she" to "I" and back again. I know some folks have asked about this very thing on the message boards.]
Mariane Holbrook07/30/08
Good job! Thank God for our direct line to Him. A very interesting take!
Verna Cole Mitchell 07/30/08
Creative and encouraging ideas presented.
Pamela Kliewer07/30/08
Great take on this topic! I enjoyed reading this.
Joshua Janoski07/30/08
A very creative entry. This looked like it was fun to write, and it had a very good message to convey. I appreciate you sharing this.
Jeanette Oestermyer 07/31/08
What a wonderful story. I had no idea it was about a call to Jesus. What a surprise when I realized how special the call was.
Then I was so happy that the Grandmother came to get the girl. Keep writing.
Holly Westefeld08/01/08
Jean, congratulations on placing 11th out of 63 entries in Beginners! That is quite an accomplishment!