The Official Writing Challenge
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07/24/08
Hmmm, there is quite a bit going on here. I don't think I followed much of it, I like sci-fi stories and there were hints of unusual things throughout this story. I think there just weren't enough words to fully explain everything. I did like the character of the Squire though, very nice! You have a good opening. ^_^