The Official Writing Challenge
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07/24/08
Oooh, you got me there! Lots of good suspense and I was right there with her, hoping that it wasn't bad news and something good would happen. Nice job! ^_^
07/25/08
Hi - amazing story - I liked it - short sweet and kept my interest and to the point. Good twist - kept me guessing - Like the ending. Great writing.
07/29/08
Nicely written and a very good read. I like the way you described the details, and then turn the story around to say 'it was just a dream', and still be able to put in the readers' minds visually the feeling of anxiety in the aftermath of realization, and the possible unpleasnt news that may come from the unexpected call. The last line ends the story very well, in providing the readers a sense of ultimate relieve.