The Official Writing Challenge
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07/26/08
I really liked this...the reminscing, especially the line "I knew when she talked to my grandmother because usually she never talked, just listened."... the application of needing a place to communicate with God.

Well done..**THIS SPARKLES**
07/26/08
I really, really like your story. There are some wonderful memories and a fantastic lesson.

You may want to vary the length of your sentences. Some need to be shortened. A reader tends to lose interest and get lost in long sentences.

Terrific