The Official Writing Challenge
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Creepy. You gave me the shivers.

It's a good beginning to a story. You leave the reader wanting more. You do need to watch your pov. She can't know it's a man or that he has dark eyes unless she's looking at him. She can feel his eyes boring into her head.

Good job.

Your story instills fear. That kind of story really disturbs me.