The Official Writing Challenge
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This poem has a great message that flows nicely.

I did stumble over the rhythm in several places.

Very nice.
I like this, especially this last part:

God knows all our numbers
and Eternal ring tones!

Your rhyme is good, but your rhythm is off. Try to make the coordinating lines have the same number of beats.

I like the message of this. Thank you for writing it.
You have done a great job of covering a variety of thoughts related to the topic. I especially like the final two stanzas.