The Official Writing Challenge
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07/24/08
I like the message you're conveying. God is the one who gives us rest.

There are a few things you could work one. First, stay in one POV. Either the cat's or Sylvia's. It would be cool if you told the story from the cat's pov. I liked that part. Also, show don't tell. Let me feel her despair and lonliness.

Good job.
07/25/08
Very creative! I imagine there are many people in this world that have that phone routine each day...so sad. Thank you for writing this.