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Wow! What impact. You captured the irrational parent perfectly. A child's death does awful things to a parent. I get the feeling this is a personal experience article.

Although, this expresses strong emotions, it needs to impact the reader more. Stronger descriptions using more 'show don't tell' words will do. Pull the reader in to feel her pain. Also, the opening was a bit confusing. Made sense later, but you may want to reword. It would be great to know why & how the child died.

Great job connecting to the reader.
This is a very heartrending description of tremendous loss and heartache. If this is a true story then I am so sorry for the loss of your son.

You wrote the story well. I too would have liked to know how the little boy died.

Great job and keep writing! May God richly bless you and your writing for Him.
07/24/08 sad! You described the love of a mother for her child so well, and the way the heart knows before the mind does. The frantic delusions are so well written. Well done.
Moving and emotional. Too sad to be "enjoyed". :) Good job controlling the flow.
What a heartwrenching story but so beautifully written.