The Official Writing Challenge
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07/24/08
I really like this storyline. You really nailed the topic. Getting a call from Heaven, that's awesome.

This piece needs some editing. The reader gets lost in the wordiness and formatting.Also, use contractions. Write the way people speak, you'll connect with the reader better.

Wonderful.
You chose a very emotional topic and dealt with a lot of feelings. I know that the word limit made it difficult to tie all of the story line together. I hope you will write a longer, more detailed version of this touching story.
07/24/08
Wow! How creative!
Just a helpful word, put an extra space between paragraphs to help the reader.
I loved this...beautiful!