The Official Writing Challenge
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07/17/08
Pretty good! I like the story and how it showed time progressed. My only note is the ryhme seemed slightly forced in the second and last lines of the first verse. Otherwise, I liked the last verse best, it was nice! Good job! ^_^
07/17/08
Great message. I especially liked the line "of having my body on the sharp edge of a knife" — very visual.
07/19/08
The testimony is great. Some editing might improving the flow of the words.
07/20/08

This poem is a wonderful encouragement to children born with disabilities. Thank you for sharing!