The Official Writing Challenge
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06/12/08
The choice of words and descriptions I could tell were carefully chosen. You had some great lines and one of my favorites was "Where are the bleacher bums, hotdogs and peanuts…”peanuts anyone?” as you wished to go back to a time when things were not conflicted. However, I did find your transitions from the past to the present confusing at times. The message still shone through and as we are going through the estate of my MIL right now I found myself thankful that there has been no quarreling.
06/12/08
I'm not sure I understand everything that happned, was the grandma remembering all of this? I wasn't really sure what was happening, why they wouldn't talk to Donna, just because of money? That's so sad! ^_^