The Official Writing Challenge
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06/12/08
Quite a title! This opened very well, but the ending was a tad too happy for me. lol. I wanted to see what would really happen, after all those years and the hints of bitterness, disappointment, etc, I wasn't expecting a nicely done up, happy ever after kind of feel. It's a good story though, maybe you could expand it! ^_^
This is a really well-written piece, but I agree with the above comment about it having a too neatly tied ending. I'm guessing the word limit had something to do with it.
Also, on the persnickity side, you confused the names Grace and Rose when Tom arrived :)