The Official Writing Challenge
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06/05/08
Short and sweet! You did well with showing the character of Matt, I liked it and the way it was so simple, I sense a deeper lesson in here. Nice job. ^_^
Very heartwarming character development. Look at the places you use the word "is." Can you choose a more active verb? For example, in the third sentence what about something like 'His smile radiated' instead? I love what he says to his grandma!
06/08/08
My Favorite so far... I felt like I knew the main character by the end. Thanks for sharing.

06/08/08
A heart-warming read. I can sense in your writing you have more to share about Matt, but you are not writing them down because its close to your heart. Writing can do wonders for the heart - it's a gift of God - so don't stop writing!