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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: The Family Home (05/29/08)

TITLE: A Haven of Rest
By Sibongile Mtopo


The Family Home
A haven of rest

Tick – tock, tick –tock, tick … the clock finally strikes knock off time. It has been a long, hectic, one of those ‘bad day at work’ days and I must admit I have cast my eye on the clock one time too many in the last hour. The only consolation, and yes, encouraging and refreshing thought has been the knowledge that the weekend is finally here.
Humming my favourite hymn, and with renewed vigour, I gigantically stride-jog-run to my car as I have one hour to pick up my two girls. The glorious thought of getting home suddenly erases the throbbing and gripping tension that had ensnared my head like a vice. Fortunately, despite the usual Friday evening traffic jam, I managed to pick up the children in time to avoid ‘late pick-up penalty charges’.
The familiar rainbow of blossoms in the front garden and their heavenly sweet scent ushers us home. What a sigh of relieve as the key turns the latch open and the children run past me into our home, throwing their bags onto the hallway as they race for their most favourite ‘first-electrical-on getting-home’, the TV of course. I immediately remind Ginnie, the seven year old, about rules of the home; the first one being, ‘wash your hands first thing when getting home. With much persuasion and patience, I finally get ‘J.D.’, the toddler’s hands washed up.
While the girls thirstily suck on fruit-ices, I quickly get the Friday night favourite meal ready. As the rich aroma of rice, Quorn sausages and steamed vegetables sweetly diffuse into the lounge, the children dance with joy, edging nearer and nearer to the dinning table in anticipation of satiating their rumbling tummies. The door bell rings and suddenly the children chorus ‘Dad’s home! Dad’s home! Dad’s home!’
Dinner is set! Within minutes the family gathers round the table, says grace and food is passed round. We all savour the delicious meal, no rush, no hassle, no fuss, no worries and no check out deadlines because this is our family home! While the day had started on a bad note; the peace, tranquillity, safety and security of our family home has turned it all for the better.
There is however, a bigger and better family home. One built of precious gold, decked with all manner of precious stones, with spacious lounges and the biggest and best dressed dining tables. This family home has the ultimate peace, serenity, security and… what can I say, all that a family home should be. This sounds like heaven to me!

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Sara Harricharan 06/05/08
Quorn sausages sound good! I liked the light feel and descriptions of this piece, it was just wonderful. ^_^
Catrina Bradley 06/07/08
Great descriptions - I could see (and smell) everything. I'm left with a sense of peace after reading about this family home. I do think the last paragraph, while good, feels "tacked on" and your story would have a stronger ending without it. I enjoyed reading this very much!
D. Phenes06/08/08
I agree you did not need the last part. Unless you wanted to make a devotional out of it.
Very good idea for the topic. I can relate to those FRIDAYS too..