The Official Writing Challenge
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06/05/08
Quorn sausages sound good! I liked the light feel and descriptions of this piece, it was just wonderful. ^_^
06/07/08
Great descriptions - I could see (and smell) everything. I'm left with a sense of peace after reading about this family home. I do think the last paragraph, while good, feels "tacked on" and your story would have a stronger ending without it. I enjoyed reading this very much!
06/08/08
I agree you did not need the last part. Unless you wanted to make a devotional out of it.
Very good idea for the topic. I can relate to those FRIDAYS too..