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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: The Family Home (05/29/08)

TITLE: The Heart of a Home
By Beckie Stewart
06/02/08


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This winter seemed particularly longer and colder than previous years. I’m tired of being alone nine months out of the year. I tried to appreciate the times the deer and bears meandered by, but it didn’t fulfill like human companionship. I missed George and Bea. As the snow melted away, I yearned for their presence.

Spring eased in with the chirping of birds and the aroma of lilacs in the air. It also brought the sound of unfamiliar voices with high-pitched tones. They spoke at speeds impossible to comprehend. When I did understand, I heard, “This is unacceptable. This has got to go.” They never discussed their plans with me and insisted I needed to change.

My surgery started quickly after their first appearance. I was distraught over the extent of what they removed. It took months for the alterations to be completed. I was barely recognizable to my old self. I heard these modifications raised my value and made me easier to live in. I got the impression that transformations were good, but I wasn’t sure.

However, when Frank and Pauline and the three teens arrived, I discovered I was no longer alone. I loved the smell of bacon, garlic, chicken, or even spaghetti throughout the house all year long. My favorite was Pauline’s apple pie.

Verne, Ginny, and Bill shared the same bedroom. They argued occasionally, but most days their laughter shook the walls. I found myself surrounded by unconditional love and a spirit of peace. I realized that my procedure had been necessary. I was happier than I had ever imagined possible.

As the years passed, the teens grew up and left. They always returned for the holiday celebrations. One cold October night, Pauline died. Everyone came home to comfort Frank and though they missed her, rejoiced that she was with Jesus. It wasn’t long before Frank left me alone, never to return. It was the worst loneliness I ever felt.

One day I heard a familiar voice. Bill had returned to me with an active giddy toddler in tow. She only visited him on the weekends, but it was a blast to observe the way Bill tenderly loved Suzie. What fun it was to watch when Suzie climbed on his feet. He sang, “Jesus loves me” and danced around the kitchen. It calmed all your nerves to listen to the two of them together.

When Suzie became a teenager, she finally came to live with us all the time. Oh, they argued about Suzie’s clothes, hair, and friends. Eventually they said, “I’m sorry,” hugged, and said, “ I love you.” Suzie went to college, but came home every summer. When Suzie got married and moved away, we missed her. We loved whenever she visited, and Bill loved to spoil those grandchildren.

When Suzie wasn’t visiting we took comfort in the furry creatures we kept around. My favorite over the years was Snowball, a frisky kitty. She hid when people came to visit but rolled up in a ball on Bill’s lap as he fell asleep in front of the television each night.

The years quickly passed by and then, without any warning, Bill left with no explanation. Suzie arrived alone a few days later. I listened as she cried and talked on the telephone. She was struggling to keep her marriage together. A few days later I overheard her say, “My dad died early this morning. I can’t believe he is gone.” She sobbed for hours after hanging up.

In time Suzie’s husband and four children turned up to live with me. At first the fighting was unbearable, but months later, they settled down. They mentioned the need for an operation on me again. They stated how lifting “this” and removing “that” would make me more livable if they were going to stay. I was less scared this time.

I learned over the last fifty years, that variety is good. Suzie and her husband needed improvements and with it came reconciliation. I observed a new love develop. I listened to the laughter of children again. With my renovations came more room for all to abide.

I never was the biggest or most fancy house on the block. I watched new ones being built over the years that made me look shabby and poor. However, I was a place where Jesus was always taught and honored. I was the place in the end where we all learned to dwell together as one big happy family.


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Yvonne Blake 06/05/08
I loved your first person POV from the house's perspective. Also, I've always envied those who live in houses that belonged to the family for generations.
Well done.**THIS SPARKLES**
Debbie Wistrom06/08/08
What a creative POV. Creativly wonderful, I enjoyed the tone of this entry.
Joanne Sher 06/09/08
You did a lovely job with the POV on this - there are a few this week that tell from the house's point of view, but not all of them nailed it. I believe you did. Lovely.
Joy Faire Stewart06/09/08
You gave the home "heart." I loved it. Excellent writing.
Beth LaBuff 06/09/08
I love your unique point of view in this story and the thought that a home actually enjoys things like "the smell of bacon", etc. Then the idea of the "operation" on the house was fun to read. --Thanks for rehinting -- I actually left a comment on an entry with a similar title thinking it was yours. :)
Catrina Bradley 06/09/08
I, too, like the pov. I also like how generations of one family inhabited the house. The surgery comments made me smile. You really made this house seem like a family member. (ps There is one little tense shift in the first paragraph.)
Norma-Anne Hough 06/10/08
Lovely POV and told with such warmth. Jesus definetly dwelt in that home. Well done
Aaron Morrow06/10/08
Wonderful work, the POV is inspired!
Great job all around, there is one point whare you move from and "I" to a "we" which I thought was a great transition, I think sticking with that would have added even more to the "family" tone (wherein the home becomes a part of the family).
The descriptions were great, definitely one of my favorite reads this week!
Marilee Alvey06/10/08
I didn't get in on any hinting...just saw this and gave it a read. I really enjoyed it. I've always been frustrated by the fact that the house lives so much longer than we do, but, sometimes, I think it's good that the former owners aren't around because the changes would be too much for them to take! God knows what He's doing. Nice, creative take on a generational home with a neat tie in to always improving!
Joshua Janoski06/11/08
I agree that the POV used here is what really makes this piece shine. I especially liked your closing paragraph. Your writing is getting better all of the time. :)
Dee Yoder 06/11/08
Your story brings to life the old line "if walls could talk"! I really enjoyed reading this and learning about the families from one generation to the next. A lot of living goes on inside an old home.
Sara Harricharan 06/11/08
Oh, I love this! It's so rich with descriptions and everything. You made it come alive with little details and touches like, Pauline's apple pie, etc. well done! ^_^
Lollie Hofer06/11/08
Great voice in which the story was told. The renovation angle was great. Loved the house and the family that lived there. They were real people. Well done.
Loren T. Lowery 06/11/08
What a creative and well-written take on the subject this week. Great job and shows a lot of warmth, not to mention a talent for telling a good tale. Loren
Phyllis Inniss 06/12/08
Very creative and heart-warming.


   
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