The Official Writing Challenge
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06/05/08
Very interesting. I would love to read more and find out how 'home" applies. Great characters.
06/07/08
Interesting setting. I'm a little oonfused as to what kind of reeducation they were getting. Is this part of bigger story? It certainly could be made into one.
well done..keep writing.
06/11/08
Good MC, and interesting voice. I think you needed much more room than 750 words to write this story! I did like the note of hope at the end, but it's so faint, it was almost nonexistent. Otherwise, good job! ^_^
I too, am interested to know more of this story. I caught that this was a new "home", but I didn't see how family fit in. Imaginative story, though--keep writing.
06/11/08
Very descriptive and it puts the reader right in the middle of the action, which I really enjoyed. Keep up the great writing!
The suspense and tension is well done here. I hope your MC gets away-looks like he may have an ally. Keep writing, I want to read more.