The Official Writing Challenge
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Well this was quite different than I expected.
06/07/08
good story. So many of could have a son in this position, from both sides of a war.
I guess I wanted a happy ending, telling me something about his return to his unit, or home. I am not really sure it had an ending? I did get the feeling tomorrow would bring the same situation for them.
06/07/08
Wow!!! This is exciting. You kept my interest throughout.
I'm not sure you needed to name all of the family. It was a bit confusing.
**THIS SPARKLES**
A different Family Home story and very enjoyable. You carried me from beginning to end and I didn't want to leave. Well done, well done indeed.
06/10/08
This is an interesting story, certainly not the usual kind. You did very well to develope the story, in that you are in the Beginner's category. It was a bit confusing, but only because I was so unfamiliar with the setting, not knowing anything about Egypt. What a sad way for the family to have to survive. Had you been allowed more words to develope the story further, I would have liked to hear the ending...How it all turned out AFTER...Maybe some other time....Helen
06/17/08
This was very interesting. I liked it a lot. :)