The Official Writing Challenge
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05/30/08
Isn't great to have a close friend who is also your cousin? The beginning paragraph was a little confusing. I like the variety of antics you did together. The ending was rather sad.
Keep writing.
Nice personal narrative, however there is an awfully lot of info given in a small space. I would have gotten to know the two main characters better if you had just concentrated on one incident, say the weekend visiting for the baptism, etc. I am sorry to hear that they are not in contact anymore. Hopefully God will heal the hurt from these family differences. :)