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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Cousin(s) (05/22/08)

TITLE: Meeting the Cousins
By Carole Robishaw
05/28/08


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There’s a plethora of cousins in my family that we rarely get to see. We’re scattered all over the country, there for a while, it was all over the world. My sister’s family had been missionaries in far western Russia, just a hop, skip, and a jump from Alaska. Of course, they aren’t much closer now, in Anchorage. One of my cousins has been as far as Papua New Guinea, just for a vacation.

Most of us are excited if we get to travel to the next city for a vacation. I’ve done some traveling, I’ve been as far north as Algonquin Park, in Quebec, as far east as the Bahamas, as far west as Wichita Falls, and as far south as Houston. Right now I live in Central Texas, and my closest family member is my brother, in Little Rock. For various reasons, we haven’t done much traveling in the last few years, so when I get a chance to, it’s real treat.

While planning our annual a trip to Little Rock in March, I got the bright idea of asking if I could take two of our granddaughters with us.

My brother is younger than me, and our son had waited a few years to have kids, so my granddaughters and my brother’s kids are close in age. They’ve never had the chance to meet, so we were looking forward to this time.

My oldest granddaughter, Tally, who is ten, wants to be a veterinarian, and is taking training classes through the 4-H, and she gets to work in a veterinarian’s office. My niece, Chris, is in her first year of veterinarian’s school, having already completed four years of college, so they had a lot in common from the moment they met.

Tally spent most of the week following her bigger cousin around, helping with the farm chores, gathering eggs, feeding horses, and bottle-feeding two newborn goats. She was also wearing out Chris’s ears with thousands of questions about the animals.

Chris seemed to enjoy getting to play the role of teacher and big sister to her newfound cousin. She was even able to laugh when Tally declared that they were both in the same grade! Tally hadn’t quite understood that while it was Chris’s first year of vet school, it was her fifth year of college, and that there was a big difference between that and being in the first year of 4-H vet training.

Celine, who is eight, spent most of her week in the goat pen, cuddling those newborn kids. She was busily trying to figure out a way to sneak one of them into the car to take it home with us.

When the girls weren’t tending to the animals, they were “muddin” with their other cousin, Aaron, who has a four-wheeler, and they have a stock pond. What more can I say? We have some great pictures of the fantails they created when they drove that four-wheeler through the shallow end of the pond. The water was still ice cold, but we had the hot tub ready for them to climb into after getting soaked. At one point we got a bit of a scare, when the four-wheeler, Aaron and Celine rolled over in the water. Celine came up yelling, “Let’s do it again!”

We grabbed her up, stripped off the wet, cold clothes, and ordered her into the hot tub on the deck. It only took us about three minutes to get her there, but her teeth were already chattering and her lips were blue. She gladly sunk into the hot water up to her chin. A few minutes later her sister joined her.

Aaron surprised us, with his being at the age where younger cousins, especially girls, are a nuisance. We hadn’t expected him to volunteer to take them on the four-wheeler, and even less, for him to enjoy it as much as they did. He would never have admitted enjoying it, but the look on his face told more than words could.

When our week was up, the tearful girls were begging to stay, but their momma was on the phone begging for them to come home. They had never been away from home for longer than overnight before, and they were sorely missed.

It was a fun and memorable week, one I hope we can repeat. I would hate for the newfound cousins to forget each other.


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Yvonne Blake 05/29/08
(smile) It sounds like your grandaughters had a good time on the farm, playing and working with their cousins.
A little dialogue might have given more "personality" to your story.
Well done. Keep writing.
LauraLee Shaw06/01/08
Love the memory of the four-wheeler and the hot tub. You probably could have told an entire story just on that. What fun! You summed the topic up nicely with your ending.
Marlene Austin06/01/08
Nice personal narrative. You did a good job making comparisons between the cousins. :)
Lyn Churchyard06/02/08
Loved your opening line Carole, and the idea of taking your grandchildren on holidays had me wishing I could to it. Four-wheeling sounds like heart-in-the-mouth time to me :) Yes! don't let those cousins get away from one another.
Well done Carole.
Jan Ackerson 06/02/08
Nice story!

Consider giving less background material, and just focusing on one or two incidents from the family gathering. Then you can work more on developing characters and helping your readers to get to know these people better.

Your family sounds like a very interesting one.
Debbie Wistrom06/02/08
The vet school story is sweet, I can see it happening.
Joshua Janoski06/02/08
Thank you for sharing your delightful family story.

I agree that more "showing" and less "telling" would really make this already great story an even better one. Maybe insert some dialogue or talk more about specific events (like the 4-wheeling adventure). Just some suggestions.

Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed reading it.
Cheri Hardaway 06/04/08
A thoroughly enjoyable vacation! Well-written. Makes me wish I'd been there too. Blessings, Cheri
Sara Harricharan 06/04/08
This is a sweet story! I too, hope that the newfound cousins don't lose each other! It sounds like they had a great time and such adventures too! ^_^
LaNaye Perkins06/04/08
This story was a grand adventure. I loved reading every word of it. Well done!
Joy Faire Stewart06/04/08
Sounds like a great family and I enjoyed the story. It must have been a fun trip!


   
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