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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Cousin(s) (05/22/08)

TITLE: Around and Around We'll Go
By Kim Clendenin
05/26/08


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Around and around we go, where we will stop nobody knows. Through the house of mirrors, catch us if you can! Through the house of horrors, screaming with laughter that never ends. Sugared up with cotton candy, there’s no stopping us now. There are pranks and tricks and mischief to be found. Over there lies a cigarette butt, someone has thrown away. We’ll pick it up and smoke it, we’ll be tough and oh so cool. Together we’ll try anything, we simply have no fear. When one gets in trouble, the other is an alibi certain to be near.

We’re like two puppies bounding off together, no agenda in mind, getting into trouble, trying not to get caught this time.

Like a dog with a bone, treasured secrets we shall bury. We’ll dig them up again together, reminisce and be merry.

And then when we’re old and grey, with grandchildren on our knees, we’ll spin a web of mischief and send them home to thee. Reminiscing of the good ole days, never a single regret. Laughing at the antics our grandchildren are now about. “Now where did they get that idea?” we will innocently ask. Oh the fun just never ends with cousins as best friends!

High up on the Ferris wheel, around and around we’ll go, where we’ll stop, only heaven knows.


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Sara Harricharan 05/29/08
What a trip! I felt like I was literally going 'round and 'round here! The fast action of this piece is good, but a little confusing when it jumps into the cousins being 'grandparents'. Otherwise-good stuff! I love the line where cousins can be good best friends. Indeed they can! ^_^
Marlene Austin05/31/08
This reads like a poem, so the paragraphing was a little difficult and detracted from the flow. You covered details well. :)
Lyn Churchyard06/03/08
This read like a poem, and the meter was smooth flowing. I'm glad they're not my cousins... they'd wear me out very quickly. It would probably look better set out as a poem. Well done Pat :-)