The Official Writing Challenge
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Love this! The imagery here, I can see these two girls hiding together and swapping jokes with their nervous giggles. What a neat twist on this topic! I liked it a lot! ^_^
05/29/08
Great imagery. This short poem told your story well.
What a great voice that you used in this piece. I was there behing the shrubbery with you. I felt our knees touch. Your words brought back memories of sharing secrets as a young girl. Cousins do make awesome friends. Very nicely done.
Excellent descriptive writing. Loved lines like - began chirping like the birds overhead, and sharing delicious secrets - they DO have a taste, don't they? Nice job. :)
06/02/08
the poem took me back to the days when i was a girl. the different ways in which we shared "delicious secrets". thanks for triggering the memory.