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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Cousin(s) (05/22/08)

TITLE: Delicious Secrets
By Mary Lisa
05/25/08


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We were comrades safely
Tucked away beneath
The green, leafy stone walls
Of our backyard hiding place.

Our innocence was hidden
By the tall rosebushes
And their ripe blossoms
That served as our fortress.

A pair of young girl cousins
Exactly the same age, preteen,
Curious about coming of age
And glad to spend an afternoon together.

Our childhood bare knees touched
On the sandy, damp floor
That mingled an earthy
Fragrance with the rose petals.

We didnít want to be found
by younger siblings, too naÔve,
So we hid ourselves to exchange
What tidbits we knew about growing up.

At first, we shyly grinned at one another
And, then, began chirping like the sparrows overhead,
As we whispered delicious secrets
And shared the latest almost-dirty joke.

We were friends, more than cousins,
Amassing treasures of memories
For a lifetime Ė our nervous giggles
Are what I choose to remember most.


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Sara Harricharan 05/29/08
Love this! The imagery here, I can see these two girls hiding together and swapping jokes with their nervous giggles. What a neat twist on this topic! I liked it a lot! ^_^
Pamela Kliewer05/29/08
Great imagery. This short poem told your story well.
Leticia Caroccio05/29/08
What a great voice that you used in this piece. I was there behing the shrubbery with you. I felt our knees touch. Your words brought back memories of sharing secrets as a young girl. Cousins do make awesome friends. Very nicely done.
Marlene Austin05/29/08
Excellent descriptive writing. Loved lines like - began chirping like the birds overhead, and sharing delicious secrets - they DO have a taste, don't they? Nice job. :)
Asha Mathew06/01/08
the poem took me back to the days when i was a girl. the different ways in which we shared "delicious secrets". thanks for triggering the memory.