The Official Writing Challenge
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05/15/08
Hmmm, this is pretty good. I liked the story how it played out, though I wasn't sure how the seven months fit in, since it wasn't mentioned until the near end. I did like MC's voice though-very realistic. ^_^
Very enjoyable story. You were able to relay your MC's feelings without excess drama. Some nice turns of phrase too... ”That’s your tail. I’ll sit on mine.” and
"tangibly present….to hail…to nuzzle…to embrace….dare I even say the word …..to kiss?" Really added to the story. Well done.


05/20/08
Yes, this is good. Even if it doesn't place (‘beginners’ is a deceptively tough level)' this story is still good. Keep it up.
I'm guessing this is true. If not, you've made it very real. You pulled your reader right along with you. Very nicely done.
05/23/08
Congratulations, Carolyn, on placing eleventh in your level with this piece. Great job!