The Official Writing Challenge
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05/15/08
Hmmm, it seems like there's more to this story here than just this short piece here. I noticed a lot of it was in present tense, perhaps past tense would work better next time-present tense works best when it's in dialog and you're 'telling' the story to another character. Otherwise-nice job! ^_^