The Official Writing Challenge
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05/08/08
Lots of emotion into here, with old memories and stories and feelings. I liked the example of it feeling like that Agatha Christie Novel, very well done! I liked the last paragraph best.
This may be my favorite article in this category. Wonderfully written, well chosen words touched my heart. I felt your pain and your hesitation as you grappled for the right response in an appropriate time within a "normal" conversation. This was an aawesome sentence: "All that remains is the history of having, and even that is fractured, incomplete, without the other storytellers". Powerful. Your description of "sisterly aloneness" was perfect, too. What I loved most was your last paragraph, which was a deeply moving prayer and cry out to Abba Father. Yes, indeed, you have brothers. More than you can count. Nicely done. Be blessed.
05/15/08
Oh my, such emotions! I have not lost a sibling and yet there were tears in my eyes to the reality that one day I will be where you are standing now. I loved the cadence of the piece, it flowed quite well with the raw emotions that were being felt by the author. I also enjoyed the hope that is given in the end. Well done! Congratulations.
05/15/08
Congratulations on your 1st place. The voice of this is very good. Nice job with the topic.
05/24/08
This was gorgeous and melancholy...I loved it. Congrats on your well deserved first place win. With writing such as this, you will be rising through the ranks quickly.